You are interested in attending a short course at a college in an English speaking country Write a letter to the college administration In the letter you should tell what course you would like to attend give details about your educational background and w

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am an IIT graduate in software engineering with 80% marks, and writing this letter to request you to sponsor my further education for an eight months machine learning course in Japan. This is a short-term course where I will learn artificial intelligence and its applications in road safety and transport.

The reason for opting for this course in Japan is due to the latest technology and techniques used by the Japanese institutions which are currently unavailable in our country. After the completion of this course, I am planning to establish my own company where equipment and machines related to road safety will be manufactured. Moreover, this will also help the government in preventing road accidents by predicting pedestrian’s behavior and walking patterns.

As I come from a middle-class family from Haryana where I am the only earning member of the family, I am not financially capable to afford a foreign education. However, I can assure you that with the knowledge which I would gain from this course, I will be able to add a greater value to the current road safety system of my city. Therefore, I would request you to provide financial assistance to me to enroll in this program in Japan.

I hope to hear back from you soon.

Kind Regards
Peter Parker

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1088.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 218.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99082568807 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92361297637 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600917431193 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 290.88556701 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.8351143995 44.8134815571 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 76.5299724578 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134678611207 0.216113520407 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545705043474 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573287627961 0.0603063233224 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964778642593 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060127062217 0.0580467560999 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 8.37731958763 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 7.59969072165 124% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 41.2886597938 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.