You are looking for a part-time job at a golf club.
Write a letter to the manager of the golf club.
In your letter,
introduce yourself
explain what experience and special skills you have
tell him/her when you could start
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Mahesh Sharma and I am a second year M.Com. student studying in a reputed college.Along with studies,I am interested in doing some work also to gain some experience.I am writing this letter to ask you whether there is a part-time job facility is available at a golf club.The best part is the golf club is within 2 km from my college which is an advantage.
As a post-graduate student,I have various subjects;but I am very good at finance and accounting.I can resolve any problem related to accounts in a quick and easy manner.Also,I used to take tuitions after my graduation where my special subjects were finance and accounts always.If you wish,you can take a test about the same to check my knowledge and skills.
I assure you that this will neither impact my studies nor this job.I will do it with utmost dedication.If I get selected,can start from next week onwards.
I am sure you will give this opportunity to me.
Hope to get a positive response soon.
Yours sincerely,
Mahesh Sharma
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...sitive response soon. Yours sincerely, Mahesh Sharma
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 855.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 179.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77653631285 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89403808655 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.675977653631 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 126.091155883 44.8134815571 281% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 122.142857143 76.5299724578 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5714285714 16.8248392259 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 4.34317383033 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 2.54639175258 668% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216979188521 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793240292064 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807973210299 0.0603063233224 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963702507908 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721675865372 0.0580467560999 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 8.37731958763 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 8.62886597938 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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