You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall.You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:•describ

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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall.

You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:

• describe what the group does

• explain why the group is good for the community

• suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Mr Harris,

I hope this letter finds you well. As you are familiar with Cheki band which I am one of its members, used to practiced on Tuesday and Friday evening in community hall. Yesterday suddenly your assistance called me and she announced us we are not allowed to use there anymore. all the members are really astonished.

Let me explain you in detail, why are we need this hall .In fact this five-member group is a classic music band, as we are living in such a cottage rooms, we haven't a professional space to improve our skills .furthermore we are planning to make a fascinating album to publish our songs as soon as possible. besides, Playing classic music in this ancient hall is caused to rise number of visitors which are coming in every Tuesday and Friday.

According to your assistant suggestion, I am considering to change the days of performances if it's possible.

I am quietly obscure which days another performances are running, However, for our band there seems no problem to set sunday and Wednesday morning as our meeting days. So, would you please indicate us about your hall free times? your assistance in this matter is greatly appreciated.

Your Sincerely,

Chi Chung.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s greatly appreciated. Your Sincerely, Chi Chung.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, really, so, well, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1004.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 207.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85024154589 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7003318513 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642512077295 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 313.2 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.1184375097 44.8134815571 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2727272727 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8181818182 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 4.34317383033 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205758353797 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683098724834 0.0766984524023 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746184886556 0.0603063233224 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11368191905 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0839385282455 0.0580467560999 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 8.37731958763 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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