You have applied for a course in a college, but there were no places available. Write a letter to the principal and ask to enrol for the next available course. Include the following:- Why do you want to do this course?- What other options would you like t

Dear Miss. Mary,

Hope this letter bestow you radiant health, wealth and best spirits. I am Zara Noor your college final student. I am writing this letter to inform you that I applied for banking and finance course in couple of days ago, on dated 22-March but due to insufficient numbers of students i am not selected for this course.

This course is really significant for me because it is my final year and my main course is related to banking field after that i will start my internship in banking industry that's why I really want to do this course. Furthermore, I would like to inform you that I an top performer of your college. Meanwhile, I have won many international competition on the behalf of your college. I would like to insist you kindly include my name in your course because it will be really beneficial for my future growth.

Requested to you, if you give me a chance to attend banking and finance course I will get top position in my final examination.

Waiting for your positive response.

You will contact my phone number 001234567.

Yours sincerely,
Zara Noor.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...due to insufficient numbers of students i am not selected for this course. Thi...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... is related to banking field after that i will start my internship in banking ind...
^
Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...start my internship in banking industry thats why I really want to do this course. F...
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Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...internship in banking industry thats why I really want to do this course. Further...
^^
Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...more, I would like to inform you that I an top performer of your college. Meanwhil...
^^
Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: I_A[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am' (first person of "to be")?
Suggestion: am
...more, I would like to inform you that I an top performer of your college. Meanwhil...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, really, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 916.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 192.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77083333333 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59799268133 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572916666667 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 277.2 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3382446312 44.8134815571 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2727272727 76.5299724578 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4545454545 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 4.34317383033 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333120709004 0.216113520407 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108506621012 0.0766984524023 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819547201686 0.0603063233224 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167428277021 0.12726935374 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794892811443 0.0580467560999 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.