You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect Write a letter to the editor of the magazine In your letter correct the information in the article explain why it is impor

Submitted by Agni on Sat, 12/19/2020 - 12:38

Dear Sir,

My name is Griffith and I am long-standing reader of your Magazine 'Wanderlust' . Recently, I have come across an article written about my town 'Darwin' in Australia which is factually incorrect and prompted me to write this letter. The said column heading is 'Darwin - Not Charles Darwin' published on 20 th April edition. It is not my intention to be condescending, as loving resident of my town, it's my duty to bring it to your attention. To point out, the flaw is, reporter mentioned that the city is not well connected by flights and connectivity is available only from surrounding airports like Sydney. However, it's totally incorrect and infact City is well connected by road,water and air-ways. Especially, if some one coming by air they can directly land into international airport where tickets are available from major cities all around the world like Dubai, Singapore and London.

Henceforth, it's my humble request, please verify the information before it's circulated. A travel based periodical such as yours should have first hand source before printed. Otherwise, the reputation earned from years will be at stake and it's really difficult to regain the status. Therefore, kindly enter details are accurate and cross-checked when they are edited. Enthusiastic travelers, who are subscribers of your journal, might get confused and land in unnecessary trouble. Further, reliable sources are now available on Australian government website if you want to cross-verify.

After explaining the graveness of the mistake, it only sounds logical to publish a correction newsletter along with apology note in your upcoming edition. Hitherto, ensure all information has genuine resource and gone through proof-reading before cover story is circulated.

Hoping my letter did not disappoint you and thank you in advance for supporting my active participation.

Yours Faithfully,

Griffith.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...nding reader of your Magazine Wanderlust . Recently, I have come across an article...
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Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ite this letter. The said column heading is Darwin - Not Charles Darwin publish...
^^^
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...his letter. The said column heading is Darwin - Not Charles Darwin published o...
^^
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eading is Darwin - Not Charles Darwin published on 20 th April edition. It is...
^^
Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Charles Darwin published on 20 th April edition. It is not my intention to be co...
^^
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...cending, as loving resident of my town, its my duty to bring it to your attention. ...
^^^
Line 3, column 681, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , water
...nd infact City is well connected by road,water and air-ways. Especially, if some one c...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...i, Singapore and London. Henceforth, its my humble request, please verify the in...
^^^
Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...hey are edited. Enthusiastic travelers, who are subscribers of your journal, might get...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs, who are subscribers of your journal, might get confused and land in unnecessa...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.48453608247 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 937.175257732 172% => OK
No of words: 296.0 206.0 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4527027027 4.54256449028 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 3.78020617076 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00695109304 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 127.690721649 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.692567567568 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 290.88556701 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9321737064 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9411764706 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64705882353 4.34317383033 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233649997749 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602938439195 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628837330057 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110362610153 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341475478349 0.0580467560999 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 8.37731958763 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 70.7449484536 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 8.71597938144 161% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 7.59969072165 128% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 41.2886597938 240% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...nding reader of your Magazine Wanderlust . Recently, I have come across an article...
^^
Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ite this letter. The said column heading is Darwin - Not Charles Darwin publish...
^^^
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...his letter. The said column heading is Darwin - Not Charles Darwin published o...
^^
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eading is Darwin - Not Charles Darwin published on 20 th April edition. It is...
^^
Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Charles Darwin published on 20 th April edition. It is not my intention to be co...
^^
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...cending, as loving resident of my town, its my duty to bring it to your attention. ...
^^^
Line 3, column 681, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , water
...nd infact City is well connected by road,water and air-ways. Especially, if some one c...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...i, Singapore and London. Henceforth, its my humble request, please verify the in...
^^^
Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...hey are edited. Enthusiastic travelers, who are subscribers of your journal, might get...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs, who are subscribers of your journal, might get confused and land in unnecessa...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.48453608247 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 937.175257732 172% => OK
No of words: 296.0 206.0 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4527027027 4.54256449028 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 3.78020617076 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00695109304 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 127.690721649 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.692567567568 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 290.88556701 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9321737064 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9411764706 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64705882353 4.34317383033 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233649997749 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602938439195 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628837330057 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110362610153 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341475478349 0.0580467560999 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 8.37731958763 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 70.7449484536 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 8.71597938144 161% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 7.59969072165 128% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 41.2886597938 240% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.