You have learned that a financial organization in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part time course You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan Write a letter to a local financial organization In your

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You have learned that a financial organization in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part-time course. You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan. Write a letter to a local financial organization. In your letter:
1. give your qualification and work experience
2. give details about the course
3. explain how this course will help you

Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is James Brown and I am writing this to inquire about the loan given to the students who are willing to participate in the 3-mouth financial management course held in the next 3 weeks.
To begin with, I consider myself as a suitable candidate for this opportunity to be funded due to my background in sales career and field of study at university. I have been working in the sales team of my company which focuses on real estate marketing since I completed my bachelor's degree. Then, I majored in MBA at Avicenna University in Georgia in 2019.
About the course, many provisions have been made to make it practical. For example, Mr, Johns, the CEO of the sales department of Microsoft corporations is giving a speech regarding the new mindset and techniques of modern sales. Furthermore, the top 3 candidates who manage to showcase their abilities and knowledge are bound to receive well-paid job offers at the end of the program.
As a result, attending this course will lead the students like me to be much more competent and skilled in this field, and, in turn, opens new doors to a bright career future.
Thank you for your consideration. I am looking forward to hearing from you,
James Brown

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, look, regarding, so, then, well, for example, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1021.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77102803738 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74459823293 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644859813084 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 316.8 290.88556701 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2877822926 44.8134815571 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.1 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 16.8248392259 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 4.34317383033 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151279523995 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547842879846 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537615595848 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874935950044 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566046127921 0.0580467560999 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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