You have planned to study a distance course online from an international university Write a letter to the university officer requesting information about the course In your letter write Why you are writing Which course it is and when you plan to study Why

Dear Mr. Wang,
I am writing to request your assistance concerning an online distance course that I would like to pursue at Western Sydney University. The university website helped me get your contact information to know further details about the system I want to opt for.
I recently searched for some good international tertiary educations that can supply an E-learning course in Bachelor of Business (Marketing). I hope you could provide more information about the exact opening time of the program; furthermore, I would be grateful if you could let me know that I can start the course from October this year. My workload and pressure will be less at that time. Also, I would like to see the enrollment process and how students will arrange the tests throughout the course period. It would be beneficial to send me the detailed information.
I am working as an intern at an overseas bank in the marketing department; however, I am learning a different field and do not relate to the job. Therefore, I need more exposure and knowledge to enhance my career. Hoping your University can be able to provide me the knowledge I would like to gain.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Phạm Khánh Linh

Votes
Average: 9.7 (4 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 4.92783505155 264% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1015.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 209.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85645933014 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79572452851 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622009569378 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7055217143 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5833333333 76.5299724578 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4166666667 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 4.34317383033 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232140562805 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722190828562 0.0766984524023 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630212311121 0.0603063233224 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143570869423 0.12726935374 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570479923948 0.0580467560999 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.