You have recently been employed to work in a foreign country, but you are yet to start. One of your relatives is also interested to go with you and work for the same company. Write a letter to your manager and say– Tell him/her about yourself and your j

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You have recently been employed to work in a foreign country, but you are yet to start. One of your relatives is also interested to go with you and work for the same company. Write a letter to your manager and say

– Tell him/her about yourself and your job.
– Introduce your relative and say what kind of job he/she is interested in.
– Why do you recommend him/her for this job?

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to refer my cousin sister in your company for the senior HR position.

I have received a job offer from your organization (IBM) and I have been asked to join IBM's Canada research center next month. Currently, I am employed with Nokia in India and serving my notice period. Overall, I have seven years of work experience in IT industry and specialized in JAVA technology. In addition, I handle team of four member and accountable for end to end releases.

However, my cousin sister is very keen to join BM's Canada office. She is a HR professional with Accenture India and has five years of relevant experience in HR profile. While having a conversation about my job offer with her, she asked me to refer her as she wants to experience work environment in abroad.

I have high recommendation for her because she has brilliant work experience with excellent communication skill. Moreover, she has recently been awarded employee of the year award due to her abilities. While visiting company's portal online, I checked that there are multiple position open for HR profile in Canada and she fits really well to the job description. Hence, I request if you could arrange an interview call for her. If you need any further details regarding about her please let me know.

I look forward hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Sonali

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 346, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n Canada and she fits really well to the job description. Hence, I request if you...
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Line 8, column 430, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ould arrange an interview call for her. If you need any further details regarding ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, look, moreover, really, regarding, so, well, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.85567010309 337% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1155.0 937.175257732 123% => OK
No of words: 237.0 206.0 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87341772152 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75075067563 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 127.690721649 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620253164557 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 290.88556701 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2877693637 44.8134815571 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255228656961 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817315355794 0.0766984524023 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047881413135 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12820896729 0.12726935374 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359069199569 0.0580467560999 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 41.2886597938 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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