You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it Write a letter to the online store you bought it from and say Describe the toy explain the problem suggest how it could be solved

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You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it. Write a letter to the online store you bought it from and say:
- Describe the toy
- explain the problem
- suggest how it could be solved

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to complain about a toy, which I have ordered from your online store , and which delivered yesterday. Unfortunately, I am not satisfied with the delivered product because of the issues I have outlined below.

Well, It is a red colored remote car and I found a hairline crack on front mirror of the car after unwrapping it. Moreover, I tried to operate a car using remote but It did not function. Initially, I thought there might be an issue with batteries of a remote but after replacing the batteries with new ones, It also did not work.

I am sorry to say but I am really disappointed with this order delivery from your store. There is not only technical glitch with remote but also carelessness in packing such a fragile object. As this toy was supposed to be a birthday gift for my younger brother, which is next week.Therefore, I believe that a prestigious store like yours with quality of service will collect and replace the car as soon as possible. I would really appreciate If you would deliver the replacement at a time when I am at home. Please call me at 01246255856 to arrange a mutually convenient time for delivery.

Many thanks for your prompt attention.

Yours faithfully,
Ell Green

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tention. Yours faithfully, Ell Green
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1030.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 219.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70319634703 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80059025656 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62100456621 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 324.9 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1584738937 44.8134815571 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8333333333 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157326105572 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470795921283 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457826228142 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815587774609 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568432653667 0.0580467560999 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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