You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it. Write a letter to the online store you bought it from and say:- Describe the toy- explain the problem- suggest how it could be solved

Dear Store Manager,

I am writing this letter in reference to one of your sold product from china town. I have recently bought a toy from china town in sector 5, Kolkata. Let me tell you the details of the toy, namely magic brick toy which main functional behavior as a human lady. There are heap of button on the back side of the toy. Each button has a naming convention to perform the respective operation such as sing, eat, dance, move, play, shower etc.

Firstly I was extremely happy of the functional behavior of the toy. I felt that, I got two daughters in my house. I was waiting for my daughter to come home after her school. During that period, I was demonstrating the toy's operation to my husband. Luckily, I discovered that the music system in the toy was corrupted because, It failed to dance or sing while we pressed button either sing or dance. We have tried twice to operate however, the result was nil.

I would request, could you please replace the toy with a new one. So that, I won't lose the attachment towards the toy which I've at the moment. And I would recommend you to maintain the fresh products in the showroom to avoid bad ratings towards your brand.
Going forward, I hope to get the best product from china town.

I would be glad to hear your response!

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'heaps'?
Suggestion: heaps
...nal behavior as a human lady. There are heap of button on the back side of the toy. ...
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Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing, eat, dance, move, play, shower etc. Firstly I was extremely happy of the fun...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'toys'' or 'toy's'?
Suggestion: toys'; toy's
...ng that period, I was demonstrating the toys operation to my husband. Luckily, I dis...
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...se the attachment towards the toy which Ive at the moment. And I would recommend yo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, so, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1058.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 237.0 206.0 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4641350211 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34411636193 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632911392405 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 321.3 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.302640149 44.8134815571 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.125 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8125 16.8248392259 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231825737715 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709912623902 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644095821859 0.0603063233224 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100714670871 0.12726935374 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720495271454 0.0580467560999 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.0 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.