You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it, write a letter to the online store you it from, and say- Describe the toy-Explain the problem- Suggest how it could be solved.

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You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it, write a letter to the online store you it from, and say
- Describe the toy
-Explain the problem
- Suggest how it could be solved.

Dear sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the toy that I had purchased from your store online.

I had ordered a teddy bear from your store online on 10/09/2018 and my order confirmation number is EH0043, the package got delivered today. Firstly I would like to describe the toy I ordered. The teddy bear was brown in color, the fur was soft made up of cotton and size was large.

When I opened the package I was very surprised to see the teddy bear. It was not the one I ordered for. The teddy bear shipped to me is red in color, the fur is so rough made up of polyester and size is small.

I anticipate prompt reply from your company, could you please replace the teddy bear and send the one which i had ordered if its not available, i expect you to refund the cost of toy.

I look forwarded to hearing you.

Your faithfully,
Harry

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: brown
...e the toy I ordered. The teddy bear was brown in color, the fur was soft made up of cotton and...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ade up of cotton and size was large. When I opened the package I was very surpris...
^^^^
Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: red
...ed for. The teddy bear shipped to me is red in color, the fur is so rough made up of polyest...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 44, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nticipate prompt reply from your company , could you please replace the teddy bear...
^^
Line 9, column 146, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ich I had ordered if its not available, i expect you to refund the cost of toy. ...
^
Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...arded to hearing you Your faithfully, Harry
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 716.0 937.175257732 76% => OK
No of words: 164.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36585365854 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41616837268 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579268292683 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 222.3 290.88556701 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4141436608 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5555555556 76.5299724578 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 4.34317383033 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170016938603 0.216113520407 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691143042134 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705493163267 0.0603063233224 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115694729183 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697585941068 0.0580467560999 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 41.2886597938 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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