You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter:Explain why you want to do the voluntary wo

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing to express my wish to do some voluntary work in Nepal as I came to know that your company is doing an incredible job to help people over there.

I am a doctor with a good experience of five years in the field of surgery and presently working in a very reputed hospital in New York. I am very upset about the devastation caused by recent earth quake in Nepal which costed hundreds of lives plus thousands of people are seriously injured too.

I believe being a doctor and above all being a human being, it is my duty to provide my services there to cure people. I can work there for one month and I would like to work in some rural areas as very less doctors are present there.

Your timely reply can help me to make arrangements for this trip as well as I can apply for the leaves in advance too.

Yours faithfully,
John

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...in a very reputed hospital in New York. I am very upset about the devastation cau...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...of people are seriously injured too. I believe being a doctor and above all be...
^
Line 7, column 120, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ovide my services there to cure people. I can work there for one month and I woul...
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Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun doctors is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ike to work in some rural areas as very less doctors are present there. Your time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 705.0 937.175257732 75% => OK
No of words: 164.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2987804878 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2773471918 2.54303337028 90% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646341463415 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 228.6 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.159580989 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.714285714 76.5299724578 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 16.8248392259 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 4.34317383033 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118754717101 0.216113520407 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051849734004 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585422151324 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0733007680352 0.12726935374 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075304558287 0.0580467560999 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.96 8.71597938144 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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