You need to borrow some money to pay for something you need for your work or studies. Write a letter to your bank to ask for a loan. In your letterintroduce yourself and ask for a loansay why you need the moneyexplain how you plan to pay the money back

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am an international student at the University of Gothenburg and manage a checking account with your bank. My parents send me tuition fees and monthly expenses to your bank from Iran. Due to an error at the originating bank in Iran, I am unable to receive my payment in September. Now I am hoping you would grant me a loan.

My account number with your branch is 000215478544 and I receive money from my parents each month. They send the money from the Iran Zamin Bank in Tehran and if you look at my statement you will notice that I receive around 20 thousand Swedish Kronor on an average every month. This time a mistake from the originating bank, the Iran Zamin Bank, caused the trouble and my payment was withheld. However, I need the money to pay my house rent and my university exam fee. If I can't those in time, I would be in great trouble.

I would, therefore, request you to grant me a short-term loan of 30 thousand Swedish Kronor which I will repay within the next six months. I will receive the fund from my parents and once the withheld payment is disbursed, I can start repaying.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear from you regarding this.

Yours faithfully,

Hassan Mustafizur

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 475, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...e rent and my university exam fee. If I cant those in time, I would be in great trou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, regarding, then, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1039.0 937.175257732 111% => OK
No of words: 228.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55701754386 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50789381639 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55701754386 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 308.7 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.28266096 44.8134815571 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9230769231 76.5299724578 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 4.34317383033 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219478317871 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826814349717 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725408540776 0.0603063233224 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149831368526 0.12726935374 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860242823248 0.0580467560999 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.