You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks you realized there were some problems with the job.
Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter
explain why you took the job
describe the problems that you experienced
suggest what could be done about them
Dear Manager,
I am writing this letter to bring out the problems I am facing at National company. I am working as a part-time telesales executive in National Company.
I was looking for something on a part-time basis where I can earn some good amount of money to support my study. I took this job because of the good working hours and a reasonable amount of the money given at the end of each month.
Secondly, After couple of weeks at starting my new job supervisor started putting up the pressure while assigning the sales-target quota for a week which resulted in increasing number of hours spent at my job. As a result of this, I even missed some of the classes at my university.
Thirdly, I would suggest you to put some feasible target-related quota for a part-time telesales executive while having a discussion with the floor supervisor as well. I would be grateful if you can incorporate some set rules and procedures for a part-time telesales executive that would ease the situation now.
I solicit your co-operation on this.
Best
FaizalReza
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...sales executive in National Company. I was looking for something on a part-tim...
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Line 5, column 114, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...od amount of money to support my study. I took this job because of the good worki...
^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... money given at the end of each month. Secondly, After couple of weeks at start...
^^^
Line 7, column 246, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...job. As a result of this, I even missed some of the classes at my university. Thirdly, I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 890.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 183.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86338797814 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87516869094 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584699453552 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 286.2 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1060602787 44.8134815571 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8888888889 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 16.8248392259 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259250420158 0.216113520407 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871001260429 0.0766984524023 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519606684016 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1133148401 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515757296084 0.0580467560999 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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