You should spend about 20 minutes on this task You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall You have been told however that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall Write a le

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.

You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:

describe what the group does
explain why the group is good for the community
suggest alternative days and times for practice
You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Manager,

I am part of the musician's group which would have a meet on Tuesday and Fridays evening in the community hall, but unfortunately I have been warned that the Hall is no longer available to use the hall anymore. Moreover, with this situation I need to find some new place for the meet happen and we make a special evening for everyone.

Our group has making several people to have fun and we work hard for we arrive where we are, so I would appreciate if you give for us some authorization to use the hall on Monday and Thursday as I have been checked and the community hall is available during this days. We believe that our group of musician are making some old people enjoy and relax when they listen our music and this kind of program is also good for young people once we teach them how to use the instruments and they can became a musician in the future.

Yours sincerely,

Igor Falcao

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... the community hall is available during this days. We believe that our group of musi...
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Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'become'
Suggestion: become
...how to use the instruments and they can became a musician in the future. Yours sin...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 748.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42603550296 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33755522288 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 127.690721649 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597633136095 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 12.6804123711 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 16.3608247423 202% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.3163329636 44.8134815571 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.6 76.5299724578 195% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8 16.8248392259 201% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.2 4.34317383033 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330217399391 0.216113520407 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161668135515 0.0766984524023 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137195178125 0.0603063233224 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286051147086 0.12726935374 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837784772429 0.0580467560999 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 8.37731958763 195% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 7.45979381443 185% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.01 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 41.2886597938 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.2 8.54432989691 178% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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