You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.Write a letter to the accommodation offi

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:
describe the situation
explain your problems and why it is difficult to study/work
say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
You should write at least 150 words

Dear Sir/Madam ,

I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with the facilities of the apartment that I am currently living in. my name is Bilahi, I have just moved to flat number 6 at Complex A. I am studying architecture at AS university.

Although the studio is in the city center surrounded by a plethora of public services such as hospitals, transportation and the most importantly my university, but I am really finding massive difficulties to stay at the flat for various reasons. First of all, the studio is extremely small for 2 individuals to live in, there is no place to study or perform any kind of sports activities. Moreover, most of the house electrical equipments are very old and some of them need an urgent repair. Finally, the building garage has a limited place to park which enforce most of the people to park on the main street.

Thus, I would extremely grateful if you could please find me another apartment nearby the downtown has better services than the current one. As, I prefer the flat to be bigger and has a study room. Furthermore, I will be so appreciated if it has a private parking.

I look forward to receiving your great response.

Best regards ,
Bilal Abou

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ppreciated if it has a private parking. I look forward to receiving your great r...
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...rward to receiving your great response. Best regards , Bilal Abou
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...our great response. Best regards , Bilal Abou
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, really, so, thus, kind of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1013.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77830188679 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90852848549 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.683962264151 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 316.8 290.88556701 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0359471471 44.8134815571 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4166666667 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 4.34317383033 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122836399821 0.216113520407 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034059874431 0.0766984524023 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393679199856 0.0603063233224 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0606491539066 0.12726935374 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436970469836 0.0580467560999 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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