you were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to explain it to the manager of the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager. In your letterwho are you?Give details about the accidentsuggest how the supermarket can avoid similar acci

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you were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to explain it to the manager of the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter
who are you?
Give details about the accident
suggest how the supermarket can avoid similar accidents further.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to explain to you about a recent accident I had in your shop yesterday. Hopefully, it will draw your attention to the issue, in order to avoid similar errors in future. I would like to begin with my introduction.

My name is Amin Motamedi, and I am a regular customer in your supermarket located in MegaMall Center. I have your new “shop club” card, so you can find my complete information with my customer code “5678” in your database. I am a loyal shopper and I didn’t have any complains to write about until now. So allow me to explain what exactly happened.

I was purchasing my regular daily groceries in the back of your shop, next to the shelves of potato chips and the boxes of chocolate when suddenly a heavy chocolate box just fell on my head when I was passing by. It was a moment of severe pain and agony for me, and it could make me hospitalized if I were less agile to react and guard my head, but still, there is a big obvious lump in my head. I investigated the scene and I understood that your employee is not being as attentive as he should be when he is rearranging the shelves and the items on them. so that leads to instability of the items piled over each other without order and eventually, they will fall, as they did yesterday.

Based on my explanation of the incident, therefore, I would like you to tackle the issue by training your staff about the proper arrangement and positioning of the items immediately, and double checking the shelves on a regular basis and timely manner, according to a safety protocol. I hope such accidents never occur in your shop again because it will tarnish your brand reputation.

I look forward to seeing more safety measures in your shop,
Amin Motamedi

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...issue, in order to avoid similar errors in future. I would like to begin with my introduc...
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Line 7, column 558, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ging the shelves and the items on them. so that leads to instability of the items ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, still, therefore, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 5.05154639175 257% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 32.9175257732 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 26.3917525773 174% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 937.175257732 158% => OK
No of words: 320.0 206.0 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.625 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 3.78020617076 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77331029638 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 127.690721649 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571875 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 290.88556701 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9540651482 44.8134815571 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.714285714 76.5299724578 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 16.8248392259 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 4.34317383033 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167025141516 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566799746125 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572026526132 0.0603063233224 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099878437232 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702231093306 0.0580467560999 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 41.2886597938 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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