Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to your friend inviting him to join.- explain about the trip.- explain why your brother couldn't make it.- giving details about the trip.

Dear Martha,

How are you doing? I hope you and your family are doing well. I am writing this to apprise you on the exciting trip I planned with my brother on this Christmas. Recently, I saw an advertisement offering a tour package to Dubai sightseeing for a fortnight at a very reasonable price. In addition to this, accommodation and air tickets are inclusive in the tour package. However, I would like to invite you to join this trip.

To adduce further about the tour commences on 25th December and ends on 10th January. While touring, we will be able to explore many famous attractions such as Dubai Mall, Burj Khalifa and Burj Arab. In addition to this, the Palm Jumeirah and Atlantis hotel. Furthermore, in the second week of the tour, we can enjoy Ski Diving above Plam Jumeriah or Burj Khalifa. Before the skydiving, we must attend classes to learn about it besides we can enjoy the big bazar along with Jumeriah beach located behind the beach.

I think I have elaborated much to convince you to join the trip. However, my brother had an accident two days ago in which he has broken his leg. Thus, unable to walk and hospitalized. Therefore, he cannot further accompany to this trip.

I have enclosed some pictures of the places we will be visiting while touring. I hope you by looking at these pictures will give you a clear image of what we are going to experience and visit.

I look forward to hearing from you soon regarding your decision to accompany this trip.

Yours Sincerely,
Steven

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Martha, How are you doing? I hope you and your f...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e are going to experience and visit. I look forward to hearing from you soon r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 26.3917525773 152% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1254.0 937.175257732 134% => OK
No of words: 267.0 206.0 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69662921348 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5529008617 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614232209738 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 290.88556701 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 12.6804123711 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5745681948 44.8134815571 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.0 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0526315789 16.8248392259 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 4.34317383033 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228350798605 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738050282486 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773203434938 0.0603063233224 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126444959948 0.12726935374 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718247892167 0.0580467560999 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 8.37731958763 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 41.2886597938 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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