Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the headteacher. In your letter:
Say why you would like to go on the trip
Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask other questions about the trip
Dear Mr.Brandly,
I am Farhad Nia, Peter’s father from second grade at Kish International School. I am writing this letter to show my interest in the opportunity to join in the upcoming school trip.
I was quite happy when my son informed me about this trip because currently I have some time off work and therefore I can help in any way and spend some quality time with my son.
To illustrate things that I am capable of doing, I have a strong ability to search, organize, and coordinate activities since these are my main position in our company, Petro Co.
However, I have no additional information about the location nor the date of the school trip. Therefore, I would like to ask if you please send me the full agenda. Also, I would like to know more about the type of accommodation arranged for the whole team.
Thank you in advance for your consideration.
Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours Sincerely,
Farhad Furouzan Nia.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Brandly
Dear Mr.Brandly, I am Farhad Nia, Peter's fat...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... join in the upcoming school trip. I was quite happy when my son informed me...
^
Line 13, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... main position in our company, Petro Co. However, I have no additional informatio...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, second, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 821.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91616766467 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72947505275 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.688622754491 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.7273924336 44.8134815571 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2222222222 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 16.8248392259 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 4.34317383033 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151324115118 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069977012666 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432060737029 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0606110316098 0.12726935374 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547546750309 0.0580467560999 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 8.71597938144 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.