Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
-say why you would like to go on the trip.
-suggest what you could do to help during the trip.
-ask details about the trip.
Dear Sir,
I am Shwatank, the father of Kristan, who is a ninth-standard student in your school. I heard from my son that school management is organizing the three day international school trip To India, and I am writing this letter to express my interest as a involvement of parent to accompany children in this trip.
There are two prominent reasons that are strong enough to prove my eligibility for this task. Firstly, I am a native speaker, I can easily act as a translator between students and the Indians. This would be easy for schoolchildren while their stay in India. In addition, I have spent my childhood in India, I can kids around and show them the exquisite destinations of their places of interests.
Moreover, I am aware of Indian culture and traditions. Thus, I will make sure that each student who gets involved in the local activities will learn enough about the India. Chiefly, I would ensure their safety and security for all of the pupils. And, I assure you that all children will have adequate amount of sleep and eat a healthy diet their entire vacation.
Finally, if you concur with this application, I would like to get some basic information from you like the number of students traveling, the departure date, and the accommodation services.
I am hoping to receive a positive response from you.
Yours sincerely,
Shwatank Bhasin
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...g this letter to express my interest as a involvement of parent to accompany chil...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'kid'
Suggestion: kid
...have spent my childhood in India, I can kids around and show them the exquisite dest...
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Line 7, column 228, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ld ensure their safety and security for all of the pupils. And, I assure you that all chil...
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Line 14, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ou. Yours sincerely, Shwatank Bhasin
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, thus, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1145.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 233.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91416309013 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84425364139 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 127.690721649 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609442060086 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 351.0 290.88556701 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0375376574 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0769230769 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9230769231 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 4.34317383033 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151468541238 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467821264778 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524483310084 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843335911656 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625710663556 0.0580467560999 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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