Your family is going to move to another town Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests

Dear Sir,

My name is Eddie Brooks and writing this letter to request you for admission of my son in your esteemed institution. As I got transferred to your town I am planning to shift my whole family by next month. When I enquired about local schools my collegues and friends referred your organisation as one of the best convents in surroundings. Apart, I have seen local newspapers reviews and achievements of your students.

My son 'Peter' is diligent student with excellent academic records. The fact, that he is in 9th standard at the age of 10 stands as testimony of his talents. During his final exams in 7th grade he secured aggregate of 99% which peddled him to promotion for 9th class. Besides, he is multitalented and bagged number of awards in various quiz competitions. Further, he is an accomplished sports man and even won foot ball tournament played on behalf of his school. He is beloved by all his teachers and friends. I am sure, your school will be perfect place for achieving all his future endeavours and brings shine to your school.

Please let me know last date for admissions and procedure to apply. If there is any entrance exam to appear, my son will be happy to attend same. In case, for reference, if you need to see any credentials all documents including behaviour certificate are attached with this letter. Feel free to contact for any further information required.

Thank you in advance for considering my application.

Yours Sincerelly,

Eddie Brooks.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of my son in your esteemed institution. As I got transferred to your town I am pla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1248.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 255.0 206.0 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89411764706 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84280998793 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 127.690721649 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658823529412 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 290.88556701 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1914307602 44.8134815571 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.4117647059 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 16.8248392259 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.882352941176 4.34317383033 20% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 7.41237113402 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239979640327 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712764454853 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665774913321 0.0603063233224 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113245498925 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0976372261213 0.0580467560999 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 8.37731958763 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 8.71597938144 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 41.2886597938 172% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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