DO the dangers derived from use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh in advantages???
Food is essential for living of human beings. Healthy food helps to grow and maitain health and prevents diseases while unhealthy food contributes to risks for health. Nowadays,it is common to have a variety of cuisine on dinning table, it depends on personal preferences which type of food people love to be part of their diet. With passage of time people are considering more preserved and ready made type of food available in market for their ease and temptation for variety. Even at home most of the food is being cooked using additives such as food colours and flavours...
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Comments
My suggestion: "First of all,
My suggestion:
"First of all, use of additives such as artificial flavours and colours enhances the garnishing of a meal and it feels more appealing for people and it also boosts the taste of food items such as preserved fruits are more sweet than fresh and people eat more due to additional taste and as well as more attractive look of a meal as compared to conventional meal without any additional flavour or colour."
--Some sentences are too long and should be divided into several parts. I reckon that you use too many "and"s in one sentence.
--Also, "Healthy food helps to grow and maitain health and prevents diseases while unhealthy food contributes to risks for health. Nowadays,it is common to have a variety of cuisine on dinning table, it depends on personal preferences which type of food people love to be part of their diet. " Redundant background info.
"Secondly, eating fresh vegetables and fruits is more advantageous for health and prevention of disease , it provides more essential nutrients as compared to preserved foods"
--This paragraph should talk about the dangers or drawbacks of chemicals in food production and preservation, not the benefits of the alternatives.
Sentence: Healthy food helps to grow and maitain health and prevents diseases while unhealthy food contributes to risks for health.
Error: maitain Suggestion: maintain
flaws:
Don't forget punctuation marks.
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