Starting a career is an important milestone in anyone's life. In fact today, some people are focused on several ways of earning money rather than sticking in to one single job.Various factors could motivate this idea such as, skills, experience and education.
People have different desires throughout their lives. Some are brave and ready to take risks and stepping into new fields to achieve their dreams. At the same time some think it is wise not to take risks during the adulthood. As a result while having a stable career some become entrepreneurs. Further discussed they could be starting businesses in a different field or in the same area which they expertise. If it becomes successful undoubtedly it will help them tremendously in their retirement age. As an example I always dreamed of joining fashion industry or having a my own clothing line. After working for 4 years in the engineering field I could save enough capital to invest on my new business and hosted an online clothing store. So today, while I work on my full time career I maintain my business too.
After completion of school or college most of the people are eager to find a career in the field which they studied. There is a possibility of success or failure, depending on the skills and potential required by the employer. If the outcome is continuously discouraging students tend to go through diplomas or degrees with a higher job market and change their career paths. But at the same time they are interested in part-time jobs in the field which they studied previously.
My opinion is having several ways of income is better than a single career. It will provide more financial stability and will be an investment for the latter part of the life.
- Some governments say how many children a family can have in their country. They may control the number of children has through taxes. It is sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way.Do you agree or disagree? 70
- Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. (important) 83
- Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or 63
- Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time ? - Rewrite 70
- Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up rewrite 74
flaws:
The third paragraph is not exactly right on the topic. Don't separate ' further education ' to 'several careers'.
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