Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

In the modern world, there are a lot of virtual tools catering for people to keep in touch and communicate with one another or share their private life among them. Majority of people claim that these tools have adverse effects on groups of people and also on individuals. I am totally agree with existence of negative impact of social platforms on community. This essay will discuss the fact that social problems owing to these kinds of sites, followed by reasoned conclusion.

It is clear that most of virtual chatting sites have a limitation such as talking face to face or express the feelings. Due to this fact, social network addictions have always problems to represent their thoughts and have speaking issues. The closest friend of mine is a prime example of this. It is easily appear his addiction, because of his unsocial behavior and hesitations in his speech. However, it is possible to live talk with cameras via software such as “Skype”.

Second point that I want to touch is the fact that internet sites such as “Facebook” lead to tendency on people to make friend on more virtual life than in real life. Moreover, it is much more comfortable to choose and meet somebody, in other word, “to make friend”, for individuals on virtual. As a result, we can observe adverse ramifications on people’s social life. Although these facts, some people show benefits of social networking such as meeting the members of other cultures who are far away.

In conclusion, despite the some positive opportunities of virtual connection, its distinct harmful effects on community and individual’s social life outweigh the flawed arguments.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.263333333333 0.247107548796 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.123333333333 0.15552993741 79% => OK
Adjectives: 0.13 0.0946569551029 137% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0366666666667 0.0501201869031 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0466666666667 0.0437536398559 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.163333333333 0.122223957237 134% => OK
Participles: 0.02 0.0403219363162 50% => More participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.75398929863 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0333333333333 0.0326786765898 102% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.07 0.0861751148067 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00666666666667 0.0214082191602 31% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00333333333333 0.0119246538136 28% => More subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, whom, Whose, That.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1665.0 1933.38276553 86% => OK
No of words: 273.0 316.052104208 86% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07664233577 6.10592293882 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20519365927 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.380952380952 0.37474360046 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.289377289377 0.284197041944 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190476190476 0.203843217982 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102564102564 0.137313986986 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75398929863 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59706959707 0.560935902166 106% => OK
Word variations: 63.7775034792 60.7401812628 105% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0911823647 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5 20.7725350517 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7919869039 49.5273876611 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2195121951 93.4120437189 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3170731707 15.2821509519 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.439024390244 0.594174754866 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01102204409 120% => OK
Readability: 48.4377289377 49.1922392462 98% => OK
Elegance: 2.16129032258 1.69127372897 128% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.2746699356 0.332604825255 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.11251177888 0.102734651613 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0648503399684 0.0668474354756 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.526360936384 0.534917948617 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160353932185 0.148666948902 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111363578537 0.13441755203 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611200062035 0.0742828286743 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.259063798379 0.324241079732 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0403387220882 0.0640056729886 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172386911252 0.22793763319 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751498033649 0.0582452615562 129% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41883767535 29% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 5.88977955912 68% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.60220440882 77% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.00200400802 50% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 10.493987976 67% => OK

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.0 Out of 9