People believe that increasing the number of sport facilities is the best way to develop public health, while another says that it will be useless and requires other measures.

Essay topics:

People believe that increasing the number of sport facilities is the best way to develop public health, while another says that it will be useless and requires other measures.

It is usually argued that increasing the number of sport facilities is the best way to develop public health, but another says that it would have minimum effect on public health and requires other measures. I believe by increasing the amount of them, they would have positive effect on the public health.

Sport facilies could be public area like a park, field, and pedestarian. A gymnastic also a kind of them. Most people perhaps never do an sports because of the limited places and facilie. By enhancing them, the government hope it can attract civilitation doing simple sport, such as jogging and running. Moreover, the people are hoped to do sport continously to keep their health. Since it is rare that peopleh who like doing sport get sick.

Increasing the amount of sport facilities does not enough to attract the interest of public to do sport. In urban area, there are a lot of vehicles which cause the bad air. Government should make any regulation for programs to keep the environment clean. It can be like free cars day. The clean environment will increase public to do sport. Furthermore, clean air will take effect in health too.

Finally, increasing the amount of sport facilities will attract people to do sport, but government also have to make sure that the environment is suitable for doing sport.

Votes
Average: 5 (1 vote)
This essay topic by users
Post date Users Rates Link to Content
2015-02-13 mike rahayu 50 view

Comments

the government hope
the government hopes

Increasing the amount of sport facilities does not enough to attract
Increasing the amount of sport facilities is not enough to attract

but government also have to make sure
but governments also have to make sure

Sentence: Sport facilies could be public area like a park, field, and pedestarian.
Error: facilies Suggestion: families
Error: pedestarian Suggestion: pedestrian

Sentence: Most people perhaps never do an sports because of the limited places and facilie.
Error: facilie Suggestion: facile

Sentence: By enhancing them, the government hope it can attract civilitation doing simple sport, such as jogging and running.
Error: civilitation Suggestion: civilization

Sentence: Moreover, the people are hoped to do sport continously to keep their health.
Error: continously Suggestion: continuously

Sentence: Since it is rare that peopleh who like doing sport get sick.
Error: peopleh Suggestion: people

flaws:
o. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2

No. of Words: 225 350
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 225 350
No. of Characters: 1064 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.873 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.729 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.47 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 73 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.412 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5