Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with the academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I strongly agree with the view that practical skills are also vital and need to be taught along with the academic subjects. Many would defer with this opinion that only academic skills are important and need to be taught during the academic studies in school.
In recent days, there is strong demand to learn practical and contemporary skills along with academics. Children are not attracted towards the academic and they are more fascinated towards the contemporary and practical skills. In addition to that children found interesting to learn the fundamental skills like repairing the mobile, car, bikes and in mean time they can relax and utilize the academic skills to further construct their future. All students do not have same caliber, some are brilliant in studies and other find learning fundamental skills worthy enough for the survival and it is therefore evident that teachers and parents counsel the young ones to have fair approach for both academic and contemporary skills. For instance, during our traditional days all students were taught in boarding schools and they were also taught the both the skills. Due to the urbanization we tend to forget our traditional roots.
On the contrary, some believe that teaching both the skills will have adverse effect on academics, as children will not able to focus on their studies. According to them children will inclined either towards the academic or practical skills. As a consequence children will choose to develop only one skill, as per their convenience and therefore same would not be win-win situation for children.
To conclude, teachers should introduce the fairly balanced approach to include the practical skills along with academics. Both the skills are necessary for the children for their comprehensive growth and survival.
there is strong demand
there is a strong demand
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and others find learning
Sentence: According to them children will inclined either towards the academic or practical skills.
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would not be win-win situation for children.
would not be in win-win situation for children.
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