21.5.2016: In develpoping countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved ny providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers annd Internet access. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In remote areas, children are limited access to education due to the lack of conditions. While the investment in computers and, Internet access could help to temporarily tackle this problem, I would argue that the best measure is to establish new schools and employ more skilled teachers.
On the one hand, there are several reasons explaining expanding the Internet and supplying electronic devices like computers create more chances to approach education. Firstly, the technological platform is more convenient and flexible than conventional teaching methods, by not wasting time and shortening travel distance. For instance, these days, online programs have become well-known with high qualities that help students quickly access diverse sources of documents and information. Furthermore, online learning requires learning new technical skills such as typing assignments or doing Powerpoint because these skills are highly acquired in future work and careers.
On the other hand, children could not access a well-rounded education without dedicated teachers and renowned schools. The first reason is that schools create a more effective studying environment than learning through electronic devices. For example, having fair competitions and exams so that learners know where they are and enhance their abilities and characteristics. In addition, teachers who grasp your learning force best can discover students' weaknesses during the teaching process, hence effective education methodologies. Thus, students gain expected high results, and parents feel more secure.
To sum up, the best solution is to construct schools and recruit teachers in rural areas, instead of improving the network and hi-tech to bring opportunities for children. It can be predicted that the quality of learning will develop when installing conventional teaching methods.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stalling conventional teaching methods.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.85239852399 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86954883823 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656826568266 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6777103684 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186211707201 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601072435431 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400694613324 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114037968037 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421004018063 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.65 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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