With advance in technology, nowadays people tend to live healthier than in the past. Do you agree or disagree?
In the developed world, it goes without saying that the popularity of modern technology plays a vital role in our life. We live in an era when many of us are using advance technology. Thus, can we live without it? From my perspective, these days people tend to live healthier than previous generations due to modern equipments.
As far as I am concerned, the evolution of medical tools have increased the average life-span. A prime example of having modern facilities may be detected cancer sooner. Consequently, it reduces the risk of death, and survives more people than in the past. What's more, another equipment which can help people reduce working of overload is washing machine. It is obviously the standard of living have been improved a lot. People work less and relax more. As a result, they have time to care about health, so their health condition will be enhance as well as life expectancy. It is worth considered that advance medical systems are useful, beneficial, and advantageous for our life.
Another factor to consider is the development of social networking sites. One reason social media, is so popular, which allows people interact and study through some webs like Youtube, Twitter, Instagram. As you may know, some patients who may not go to the hospital to check their health, just need a smart tool to connect with their doctor. Additionally, people should watch healthy education programs which raise people's awareness about some diseases such as heart attack or lung cancer. Therefore, people will learn the best way to prevent the ones. If someone gets the flu, they will have some tips to protect against flu which you have learned on television. It is true that social media and healthcare could be combined to deliver better quality care, patient's satifaction.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that there are two main reasons why people today, live longer than the past with modern in technology. "Good health is more important than money". Therefore, each citizen should take care their heath to have a heathy community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06432748538 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63562392179 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637426900585 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9506267263 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.7272727273 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5454545455 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223636505873 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596983277389 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690315222514 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141193556477 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520266020221 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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