Opinions diverge on whether the elderly population brings the merits for business, the economy and society. Although this stance can be justified to some certain extent, I am at loggerheads owing to some rational reasons.
It is admitted that when people get older, they have a tendency to halt their professional life and step back in order to dedicate the remainder of their life to society without profit, specifically, volunteering. After retirement, the elderly are willing to contribute free labor for the community such as cleaning the streets, taking care of babies, etc.. For example, in a family, when both parents have hectic schedules in the whole week and they have little time for their kids, old people can take the responsibility for looking after children. That can create a premise for the society to go on developing.
On the other hand, the great proportion of the old people can be a huge burden on the pension system. That can be explained by the fact that when people step into retirement time, they will receive an allowance from the government. Perceptibly, the society accepts to lose a gargantuan amount of money for this throng. Moreover, the elderly fail to directly contribute to the country’s prosperity since they are over the legal working age. Therefore, once the rate of aged people in a particular country constitutes a critical part of the population, it means this nation suffers from the severe lack of labor force. As a result, less innovation will take place and the community become less dynamic and scarcely stay competitive.
To sum up, I still hold onto the notion that the aging population can cause detrimental problems to society, though it also leads to some benefits.
- The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 89
- The map shows how coastal land develops into a coastal park 78
- The line graph shows the global demand for different textile fibers between 1980 and 2015 Units are measured in million tonnes 78
- The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 56
- The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 355, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
... the streets, taking care of babies, etc.. For example, in a family, when both par...
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Line 2, column 560, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'creates'.
Suggestion: creates
...ty for looking after children. That can create a premise for the society to go on deve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00348432056 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7528337582 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599303135889 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.01118335 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.461538462 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151879418568 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551828004064 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520735642571 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870424250887 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201493991713 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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