Air travel only benefits the richest people The majority of people get no advantage from development of air travel To what extent do you agree or disagree

Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world . The ordinary people can get no advantage with the development of air travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays ,an increasing number of people are concerned about the phenomenon that the majority of the customers of air travel is the wealthy. However,whether the ordinary public benefit from this kind of traffic is still a controversial issue. In my opinion, the advantage that ordinary individuals get from air travel cannot be neglected.
First, it is apparently that a person can reduce plenty of time wasted on the travel by taking on a plane . No matter how expensive the air travel is, an ordinary businessman would prefer it if he was supposed to present at an urgent and critical meeting which probably brings his company much more money. So ,air travel can play an unique and unreplaceable role in ordinary human’s life.

Moreover, the commodities delivered by air have a positive effect on ordinary citizen. For example , when the local hospital lack a kind of drugs which coincidently the patient need to take as soon as possible, air travel can save a lot of precious time for the sick person. Costly as it is , it is life that is priceless.

That is not to say that ordinary public get more advantage than the small proportion of rich people. Indeed ,as the high price of air travel is more acceptable for high-paid persons,they probably have no hesitation to take plane and travel around. But the advantage that air travel brings to the rich people is just one part of the value.

In sum, the facility air travel give to ordinary people cannot be underestimated. If the high price can be adjusted ,we can make sure that air travel will even more beneficial to ordinary citizens.

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Average: 8.2 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, for example, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83986928105 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74894928371 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539215686275 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1073763356 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1176470588 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485006113835 0.244688304435 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175313300783 0.084324248473 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122751173786 0.0667982634062 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283677105591 0.151304729494 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.196720684615 0.056905535591 346% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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