For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write. How far do you agree with suggestion? How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument, in your view?

These days, some people believe that the skill of playing a musical instrument should be acquired as essential as reading and writing by all children. Nonetheless, I feel that playing music is actually inferior activity in most children’s routine, and this essay will look into reasons.

First of all, it seems that music is considered as superior for all children. Of course, most children are musically talented or immersed to this field, however, they are met seldom in everyday life. In our history were left unforgettable traces by leading musicians such as Beethoven or Mozart, who was magnificently pianist, but, the youth now hardly survives in this domain, though. Secondly, although music has several benefits for children’s education, it might narrow their future profession choice. For example, after graduation, pupils having wider knowledge from nature to exact subjects have variety of opportunities to continue their education compared with musicians. The last but not least, with respect to priorities of activities decided by parents, music is nowhere near as important as literacy which means it should have lower rank in children’s early education.

In contrast, there is still exists children who are extraordinarily talented in music at school. The better option might be if they concentrate more on music than the others who are less interested in it.

To sum up, it seems that literacy and music have different importance in children circumstances, and occasionally the former is selected as dominant one. The latter is the best choice for some children, however.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43027888446 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99055406181 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.673306772908 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2321625726 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.583333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9166666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.75 7.06120827912 209% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270359717717 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100887557278 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625274284665 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158108149161 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536786493887 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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