Every school must have physical education as a subject that should be attended by their students. The subject gives several benefits to the students, such as for relaxation and reducing their weight. Some people believe that the frequency of practical application of physical education should be increased so that it could overcome overweight problems of the students. I disagree with the statement because of several reasons and I believe that there are still many solutions applied to tackle students' overweight problem.
It is true that sport is crucial for human being, including students. However, adding intensity of sport as a subject in curriculum would not solve the obesity problem of the students because of some reasons. First of all, even if the physical education subject's hour increased quite significantly, there is no guarantee that the students will lose their weight. It could be affected by their diet. If they eat a lot, they will still suffer from obesity. Secondly, increasing frequency of sport and exercise could cause more stress to the students that are not fond of physical activities. Furthermore, those students could eat more in order to overcome their stress.
There are some other solutions that could be implemented for overcoming overweight effectively. One of the solutions is by giving nutrition education to the students. This solution could be applied in several ways, such as lecturing to the students what best diet should be taken or having lunch together that once in a week or two weeks provided by the school. The lunch provided shall contain healthy ingredients. Another solution that should be implemented is by giving best diet or exercise workshop to parents. In order to make the workshop interesting, the school could invite the experts. By influencing parents, they can deliver what they learnt in the workshop to their children. This kind of education is definitely more effective to be applied to solve obesity problem.
In conclusion, sport and exercise are definitely crucial to be implemented in school. However, it is not the best solution to tackle overweight problem of students. Some other solutions should be introduced, such as delivering learning about nutrition to the students themselves and conducting workshop discussing about diet or sport to the parents.
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- The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children Do you think this the best way to deal with the problem What other solutions can you suggest 61
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, as for, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27493261456 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79639690663 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.431266846361 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8843341525 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9545454545 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8636363636 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274041246886 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877137046465 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656326381155 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191000248057 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06704705989 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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