The birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years By 2030 it is estimated that over one third of the population in most developed countries will be aged 65 and over What effects will these prediction have on

The most people worry about over-population and crowded in the cities. However the statics and predictions show the developed countries encounter with the opposite problem "Reducing birth rate and falling population in next years". I suppose, the mention forecast is entirely true and will be occurred if the developed governments don't take preventative actions.
The aging population will make many problems for governments particularly by increasing expenditure on health care and insurance system. On the other hand, according to law, older people in retirement age won't pay tax, thus by 2050 income taxes of administration will have reduced significantly. In this condition, young people will have to overwork to support elder population while the society will be experiencing the shortage of force work. Besides, the companies and industries will change their target market from youth to elders. They will be producing and creating some goods appropriate to elder population. Consequently culture and life style will have been affected and altered by then.
To solve the decreasing birth rate, it is necessary to wear young population shoes. Nowadays to spend a routine and normal life, young generation has to work more and bear much economic pressure and hectic life. In their point of view, why they should tolerate more life pressure by formation a family and bringing a child? I believe the administration can play a substantial role to encourage them to have a child by providing more facilities for youths such as free education for their child, raising salary or reducing work time and etc. while young people don't get much trouble in their life, it is so likely to commit to have a baby and finally birthrate will increased.
To sum up, I deeply admit, aging population will be happened and governments is responsible to avoid it by taking suitable actions.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, finally, however, if, so, then, thus, while, as to, i suppose, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29431438127 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99693918868 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61872909699 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1415849832 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.071428571 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266084102584 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854985336496 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644384646615 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16070481454 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1151848645 0.056905535591 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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