Obesity is a major problem among children from last few years. In my view, this has resulted from unhealthy habits and physical inactivity , while this can be mitigate if parents and government take proper measures.
To embark with, there are two main factors contributing to obesity. An obvious reason is that current generation has access to unhealthy food. As unhealthy food contain high amount of fat and other harmful nutrition which causes problem of overweight. In addition to this , another deep-root cause of overweight is a sedentary lifestyle. Not only sedentary lifestyle is responsible for obesity but also playing video games is responsible. For example, a survey conducted by world health organization revelead that , majority of kids , who play video games and consume fast food on daily basis were suffered from obesity.
Nevertheless, this problem can be solved if lawmakers and parents take proper decisions. Firstly, the government should impose a ban on fastfood or increase the amount of tax on fastfood companies. As a consequence, kids are less likely to become to eat unhealthy food. Furthermore, parents should encourage their minors to play outdoor games such as cricket, football , kho-kho , and so on. As playing these kind of games involves using allmost parts of body so that they burn calories, and thus they prevent from obesity.
In summary, i believe that lack of exercise and unhealthy diet creat issue of obesity, but government and parents can tackle this issue through taking proper decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, in fact, in summary, kind of, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28278688525 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75509419077 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.639344262295 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5837730282 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0714285714 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4285714286 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7142857143 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136645487331 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490850529308 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052923919197 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876684159372 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368666292607 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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