Countries（where there is high unemployment）most pupils should be offered only primary education, there is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
it is not uncommon these days that the universities in many countries across the world enlarge the number of enrollments,which might be a beneficial way to contribute to the nations.However,some people claim that this way will raise the unemployment rate of graduates.
Evidently,academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career,especially when the competition in the job market is becoming increasingly harsh.Rising up the percentage of young individuals who will enter the universities may not only afford more people the opportunities of acquiring knowledge,but it also may improve their competitive abilities in their countries as well as the international world.Moreover,a country may profit from high percentage of the college graduates as they have the strong awareness of basic law and morality,which may help the nation develop safe and stable.
Even so ,it is obvious that not all the students graduate from university can be employed.For instance,someone who do not behave well in the college may not find the job when he/she graduate.However,if the universities create better academic atmosphere,improve the quality of teaching and fulfill the students’ potential,the most graduates would finally get a decent job instead of being the members of unemployed men.
Overall,in my opinion,although the high percentage of young people go to university may lead to some of them unemployed when they graduate,with the educating quality advanced and the great efforts the young people have made,they will finally find their position in the society and contribute to their countries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, even so, for instance, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72199170124 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.87266103429 2.80592935109 138% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585062240664 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 60.0 20.2975951904 296% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.885526522 49.4020404114 263% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 344.75 106.682146367 323% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 60.25 20.7667163134 290% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 26.5 7.06120827912 375% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.01903807615 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139917357528 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830749918957 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0150057494595 0.0667982634062 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0830749918957 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150057494595 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.6 13.0946893788 272% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -6.34 50.2224549098 -13% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 7.44779559118 259% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.1 11.3001002004 258% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.78 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.81 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 35.0 9.78957915832 358% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.0 10.1190380762 257% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 10.7795591182 241% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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