Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Undoubtedly, technology is one of the most important aspects of our life. Technology is very useful and profitable for comfortable and modern life. Technology has numerous effects on children, which some of them are positive and some are negative for children. Personally, I rather agree with the statement.
First, technology is interesting and attracting for children. One of the most widely spread technology is television. Television programs such as Cartoons and animations are highly attracting for children and children get massive influence from cartoon's heroes and celebrities, which was not in the past. Children like to imitate cartoon's characters speeches and acts. First decade of children life is vital period and in this time human character forms. Imitation is opposed with creativity and children with imitation of characters lose their creativity. When I was a child we play football in the garden every day, there was a TV cartoon that name was The Soccer. That was about the children that played football and after a lot of practice and effort they enrolled into national football team of Japan and they win international cup. The cartoon was amazing and we loved to watch it. After watching we went to garden but we did not play football. Actually, we only imitate and repeat the scene of the cartoon. We were interested to be a champion of football but without right practice that was impossible. After while we abandoned football and we started to learn Kong Fu because Panda was a Kong Fu master. Imitation is enemy of creativity. If we practice a lot and we had a good coach who could detect our talent and help us maybe we were able to be successful in sport.
Second, children spend a lot of their time to playing video games. Some of these games are harmful to children's brain and makers of these games always do not attention to growth of children creativity. Overwhelming in the play of these games lead children to be exhausted and also activity of these children are low. Creativity of children are related to activity and attempt to learning so spending more time to play with video games are waste of time and also harmful to children. Nowadays, children have a plenty of toys such as robot or electrical cars and dulls or even real cellphone. My father told me when he was in the primary school there was no toys for children and children in the village made their own toys by themselves. Girls made dull with wood and cloth and boys made wooden car. Children was very creative that time because there was nothing to play and they had to try to get their desire with making toys or homes with natural and simple materials.
In the comparison of today with the past children are less creative. In the modern life children learn to be consumer not a producer and this is one of the negative results of technology.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the negative results of technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 13.1623246493 258% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 10.4138276553 326% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 41.998997996 167% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2370.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 492.0 315.596192385 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81707317073 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62349170098 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477642276423 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 745.2 506.74238477 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2761357407 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.724137931 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9655172414 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1724137931 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242587365814 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704231427738 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613668256445 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159347632781 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287717072425 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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