This is true that educators and physicians play a significant role in the society in fact life could not be imagined without existence of medicals and teaching. Some people argue that tutors and doctors are paid more than sports stars and movie celebrities. While I believe that doctors and teacher are a big part of society, the contributing of film industries and sports stars could not be ignored.
On the one hand, I believe that medical and education sectors contributes at large in the community. Firstly, we all heard of that education is third eye of human as if people of any nation would be educated then they could survive in today’s materialistic world. Therefore, teachers provides education to children and make them responsible citizens of the country. Moreover, it is believed that illiteracy is darkness because people can not write or read any language so an educator can remove this darkness by making people able to write and read a language to make them aware about everything. Therefore, teachers should be paid according to their hard work and skills. Secondly, investing money in medical sector is prerequisite for the nation because no one could be safe without medicines as anyone can become victim of any normal or incurable diseases so in this case people needs treatment from a medical practitioner. The most important thing is that presently everybody has normal infection and they keep taking some type of tablets or capsules. That is why, there must be fair spending on medicals as doctors and nurses provides guidance and good health to society. Finally, instructors and physicians should be paid equally as both are the integral part of society.
On the other hand, I also think that entertainment and sports could not be underestimated as these boost the economy of the country. First of all, film industry and sports should be funded equal to medical and education sector. Films and music entertain people which is a big part of the lives of people as people work hard for whole day and they need any entertainment source in the evening which removes tiredness. For example, any comedy show makes people laugh and everybody feels relax and enjoy watching Tv with family. In addition to this, news channels provides information about what is going on in entire world that makes people aware about many things around them. Besides this, some tv programs brings motivation to the children that encourage them to be responsible and to achieve their target of life. Apart from this, sportsmen works as role models of people and they leads to sportsmanship spirit among people. Today young generation indulging in bad company and takes drugs but sport stars give a way of living life and many people leave bad company by motivating from them. So higher authorities should allocate money finance equally to all sectors as all collectively raises the economy of the nation.
To conclude, although educators and doctors are the backbone of the society yet I believe that government should not compromise with entertainment industry and sports as these are also equally important to other fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, while, apart from, for example, in addition, in fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 32.0 10.4138276553 307% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2615.0 1615.20841683 162% => OK
No of words: 519.0 315.596192385 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03853564547 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65986971661 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499036608863 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.0 506.74238477 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0727954366 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.863636364 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5909090909 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196032195957 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654250288292 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511157571041 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145085186742 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417736741776 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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