e money given to help poor countries does not solve the problem of poverty so rich countries should give other types of help instead To what extent do agree or disagree

It is said that support funds are given to countries where there are many people live under poverty line but money does not tackle this problem. Therefore, developed countries should give some solution which are effective. From my view point, I agree with this opinion and this essay will give reasons and examples.
On the other hand, funds which are given by some developed countries do not lead to the development of poor nations. So that, developed countries should share technology with their nations as technology has an important role to play in their life. To be specific, nowadays as well as in the foresseable future, technology will wonder for human life and there are many benefit of investing in technology in order that it is anticipated that their nations will developed will grow quickly. So if poor nations has a lot of money, it will allow people in their nations to meet basic human needs like: clothes, foods or medicine
On the other hand, their’s knowledge of people who live in poor country play an essential part in the evolvement of their country . So that, people living in poor countries are admitted a top-tier educational insitutions so they can improve their knowledge and broaden their horizons. When they post graduate, they can apply to job which require experienced people so they have a lot of money to earn a living good. So that, they can stimulate the econmy in their countries.
In conclude, there are some effective ways to tackle poverty in poorer countries instead of giving funds for their nation. Technology and education are have an important role in to play in the developent of poor countries.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 363, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many benefits'.
Suggestion: many benefits
...ill wonder for human life and there are many benefit of investing in technology in order tha...
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Line 2, column 459, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'develop'
Suggestion: develop
... is anticipated that their nations will developed will grow quickly. So if poor nations h...
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Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: YOUR_S[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their' or 'theirs'?
Suggestion: their; theirs
..., foods or medicine On the other hand, their’s knowledge of people who live in poor co...
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Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... part in the evolvement of their country . So that, people living in poor countrie...
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Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...ir nation. Technology and education are have an important role in to play in the dev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, well, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90322580645 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56089110766 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501792114695 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4574427637 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229363956615 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990956234531 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063347459097 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151818507341 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394880687706 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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