The writer purported that extreme sky diving and skiing should be eschewed from sports by the government. Individuals make preference of the type of sports they love to engage in ,the author stating that these sports should be abolished it is so appealing.
First people take make their choice on the type of things they do , these kinds of sports is use to fight against phobia which people develop such as phobia for height and so on and also build confidence. The divers derive fun from what they do ,so stopping it will make the individual that took it as hobby heart broken. People also earn a living from the sports for example the aiders in skiing that help the novice.
Secondly there are many dangerous sports like badminton, rugby, even high jump ,but every sports has its own rules and precautions guiding the strategy for example the mountains divers they have strong rope tied to their waist and there is no way that rope will disentangle from the anchor, and other preventive measures like wearing of helmet .
Finally people might argue that there have been records of death from sky diving and skiing , forgetting there are other sports that had cause so much death like the circuit ,bike riding and even cycling , more than these two sports, it is true but measures are taking base on the place choose for the sports and how well granded the athlete is in the sports for example ,beginners take the easy spots for diving and for skiing there are aiders guiding the unfledged.
In conclusion the author stating that these two sports should be banned by government is unacceptable forgetting that people derive pleasure from them and it is a source of income for the atlethes. And also every sports has measures guiding it because for a fact no sport is safer than the other.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72204472843 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23767620923 2.80592935109 80% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507987220447 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.528028571 49.4020404114 246% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 164.222222222 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.7777777778 20.7667163134 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202694957262 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104510817813 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722543846099 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126101781507 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669793451363 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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