Few artists ever manage to achieve fame, let alone a liveable wage. Often artists struggle to make ends meet for most of their lives. For this reason, some people believe that it is irresponsible for a parent to encourage their children to pursue arts. To what extent do you agree with this view
Artists are the great asset to a country, but it is painful to say that, they are not often get popularity or reasonable pay for their work. Hence, it is considered by some that, parents should not encourage their children to opt art as a career. I do believe that, children should choose a profession to secure their future life.
To begin with, since artists are not paid well, it is always better to learn a professional course to get better paid. If a child starts to study art as a subject, he may not be able to achieve a job which is paying a reasonable amount to meet the both ends of the life. To illustrate, many studies in the media highlighted that, even though there are many arts colleges are there in India, the percentage of enrolled students in the arts school shows the sign of decreasing due to less scope of arts jobs. So, encouraging children by their parents to join in an art class is not a good idea at all.
Although, there are some children have talents in arts, such children should be identified by their parents and encourage them to do much more. Since such talented students taken arts along with their academic subjects, they can earn a job , at the same time they can creative in their artistic works.to cite an example, recent survey of Times of India revealed that, almost 90%of students prefer to continue arts as their passion along with study, not as a career. Despite their full time involvement in arts, they perform arts for their satisfaction and make them happy. if government not provide a platform to work and earn good sum of money for artists, then it seems irrelevant to pursue arts as a career by their parents.
To summarize this topic, I would like to emphasize that, as art is a highly demanded and paid job, it is always better to support children to opt artistic career. Whereas in this context, people struggle to get fame and to lead a happy life without daily wages, then it will be always better to choose a promising career than arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, so, then, well, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54570637119 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4157059753 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520775623269 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.151370857 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.230769231 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7692307692 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277576569804 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110456593656 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059068036443 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170070728058 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694757673082 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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