it is true that science and fertilizers are conducive to the growth of food production and the decline of price. however, many hold that the utilisation of the inventions may have negative effects on human physical condition and local communities. I partly agree with this point of view.
On the one hand, machinery and fertilizers have improved people's health. Firstly, the reduced number of people who are starving is an enormous benefit. Fewer people are hungry than ever before, and this is a direct result of fertilizers and large-scale machine farming. Additionally, economists in the early 1900s believed that food production worldwide could support 2 billion people. Thanks to fertilizers, it is now thought we could feed 10 billion, and this number may increase as technology improves. Furthermore, farming could be done on a larger scale with fewer people with modern science, and that allows more people to work in other fields such as scientists and teacher, which helps our society thrive.
While I agree that fertilizers and better machinery are essential in the surge of food production, they also harm people's health and the community. First of all, cancer rates have increased dramatically in 50 years. Many doctors and researchers believed that the chemicals used to grow and produce food is a significant cause. Farmers have even bugun using producers of chemical fertilizers. Secondly, when people get cancer and become more obese, this puts a considerable burden on the healthcare system. A significant reason for health expenses is the eating pf processed food which are cheaper than simple food. Never in history we have seen the poor so much fatter than the affluent. Machines have made processed food less expensive than genuine food.
In conclusion, there is no possibilty of removing the benefits recived from fertilizers and machinery. However, I do hope that we can rely on them less and less and start making healthy food that are cheaper and more available. We have achieved great quantity, now we need great quality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
it is true that science and fertilizers ar...
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Suggestion: However
...od production and the decline of price. however, many hold that the utilisation of the ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'many holds'.
Suggestion: many holds
...tion and the decline of price. however, many hold that the utilisation of the inventions ...
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Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Never' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...ood which are cheaper than simple food. Never in history we have seen the poor so muc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16216216216 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74276612369 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1753950887 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.95 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.65 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231724421056 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620294629219 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446107834669 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128287397483 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425954065164 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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