The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the total number of queries made by the tourist at Tourist Information Office in a particular city unlike in between Jan 2011 to June 2011.
The enquiries were made in through letter or email, telephone because person. The highest number of enquiries were made in person whereas the least were made through letter. Overall, the queries for information increased in given time frame.
Enquiries made in person and through telephone increased over a period of time. The number of person who reached the office to seek the information increased from just over 400 on January to 1900 on June. Similarly, the telephonic since enquiries increased to 1600 on June 2011 from 900 on January 2011. Despite overall however increase in the number of telephonic questions from tourist, it saw the downfall in the month of February.
The questions made through email or messages decreased over a period of time wheras it reduced almost by the half fold in given time frame with about 400 enquiries therefore on June 2011.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 79, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ter or email, telephone because person. The highest number of enquiries were made i...
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Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... and through telephone increased over a period of time. The number of person who reached the o...
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Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ough email or messages decreased over a period of time wheras it reduced almost by the half fo...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t 400 enquiries therefore on June 2011.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, similarly, so, therefore, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 2.0 24.0651302605 8% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 863.0 1615.20841683 53% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 172.0 315.596192385 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01744186047 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53906072539 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 176.041082164 49% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 269.1 506.74238477 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4518297338 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8888888889 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216774269014 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101972531565 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627419727546 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146684731244 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754395000169 0.056905535591 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 78.4519038076 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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