Inventions change people's lives. Telephone is one of them. Write a paragraph about the positives and negatives of the telephone
"The birth of the phone is the turning point that changes the whole world"
For example, today as soon as you step out of the house, you will find the telephones everywhere. According to statistics of Thanh Nien newspaper, the rate of using mobile phones accounts for 70% of the total population, equivalent to 150 million devices. So nowadays, telephones are extremely popular. Unlike the landlines at home or offices, one can carry these in one's pocket. This invention that has helped to make the world a smaller place.
Due to telephone, we can do everything nowadays. Firstly, telephones are extremely convenient to exchange information. They save time, energy and labour of personally going and have any information. For example, a boss only needs to stay at home to look at the phone to know how employees at the company work. A student can stay at home doing homework while meeting online with the teacher. A person just needs to sit in one place to be able to travel online anywhere and get any information around the world, … People can call and speak to anyone in anywhere at anytime almost instantly.
Secondly, telephones are big boon in times of emergency. It is said that in times of need, a telephone can literally save a life. In other words, they like a lifebuoy to help you swim in the deep sea. For example, when you get lost somewhere, just call your family by telephone, they will come to help you. In addition, if you go to a strange place, you can turn on GPS or go to google to search for information here, if there is a language difference, you can open google translate and ask people around, …
Thirdly, in the era of technology 4.0, everything is integrated by modern technology, especially with telephone. That helps to save manpower and materials (paper, ...). For example, in the face of the complicated situation of covid-19, you have to make a medical declaration wherever you go. With the goverment encouraging declaration by app or website to save things on the above, you need to have a telephone. As a result, the invention of the telephone had changed people and almost everything was redefined.
On the other hand, the telephone can be used at any time, but the loved one sitting in front of you can't wait for you forever. Maybe one day, when you want to talk to them, they are already gone, you will never find them again. That’s right. When the whole world gradually becomes a slave of the phone, the feelings between people are becoming more and more distant. Imagine a family dinner but everyone is holding the phone, no one is talking to anyone, it's a scary thing indeed. Humans are superior than animals because of their intelligence and emotions. Missing 1 in 2 is alarming. Telephone makes us decreasingly emotional. Then one day you realize that our world is too lonely, then it's too late.
In conclusion, the telephone is the most important and useful. However, you should use them right time and right place and limit use. By contrast, consequences will happen that you cannot predict. I hope you to be a smart telephone user.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 368, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...home or offices, one can carry these in ones pocket. This invention that has helped ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
...and get any information around the world,… People can call and speak to anyone in ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
...n google translate and ask people around,… Thirdly, in the era of technology 4...
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Line 8, column 161, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...lps to save manpower and materials paper,.... For example, in the face of the comp...
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Line 10, column 101, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...t the loved one sitting in front of you cant wait for you forever. Maybe one day, wh...
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Line 10, column 456, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...the phone, no one is talking to anyone, its a scary thing indeed. Humans are superi...
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Line 10, column 502, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...scary thing indeed. Humans are superior than animals because of their intelligence a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 41.998997996 176% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2569.0 1615.20841683 159% => OK
No of words: 537.0 315.596192385 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78398510242 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68990143018 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 176.041082164 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538175046555 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 506.74238477 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 16.0721442886 199% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.0969886746 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.28125 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.78125 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71875 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 3.4128256513 440% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169159939322 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052547035405 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061738015464 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913083887335 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370297046973 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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