It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV, and a fridge. Do you think the advantages of such a development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
With the explosion of the economy, lots of people get richer, and then coming to a conclusion that everyone hopes to have some so-called basic needs like a car, a TV or even a fridge. In my opinion, there are more drawbacks than benefits for this phenomenon.
The most crucial disadvantage is this will damage our environment. It is evident that the companies manufacturing these stuffs consume huge amount of materials from the nature, such as iron. Not only they take wealth from environment, but also the cars and fridges produced by them can exhaust chemicals to air, leading to climate issues such as global warming. As a result, these unnecessary productions need to be limited to protect our environment.
Furthermore, another problem is causing negative social influence. When everyone has a need for those products, the people who don’t own it may feel depress and shameful. This is called competitive pressure. Although someone argues that these are not luxuries and can contribute to ecnomy, clearly cars,TVs or fridges are precious to those poor groups that their properties and feelings should be taken into consideration.And some richer people will buy if they want,there is no necessity for those poors to buy these expensive stuff. To avoid this bad social impact, we have to stand opposite to the viewpoint that everyone should have those products.
In conclusion, this suggestion has more cons than pros. The environmental destroy and social problems caused overweigh the boost of economy. I suppose the poor’s needs are more essential than everyone’s needs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1336.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21875 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84799648602 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6484375 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.718554227 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4285714286 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115892896471 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347747245633 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299479718326 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0640091137935 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183060998093 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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