It is inevitable that as technology develops traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible. You cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Though the technology has penetrated various aspects of human daily lives and therefore increase the quality of living, the impact of technology is surely tremendous in terms of the traditional cultures. It is often argued that the traditional cultures would disappear as the technology progresses. In my view, I completely agree with that, and my opinion would be shed light on in the following paragraphs.

It is indisputable that the traditional cultures are on the verge of vanishing since the development of the modern technology. As the efficiency of the technological advancement, it makes people convenient and efficient in terms of producing the items and products. To demonstrate, fewer and fewer people engage in making their handmade clothes recently due to the fact that the machines could manufacture the clothes in a more effectively and efficiently fashion. As a result, the advent of technology has overshadowed the traditional cultures. Another example for this is that the handcrafts are disappearing of the recent years in Taiwan because of the state-of-the -art technology.

Apart from that , with the advances and its convenience, the modern technology has changed human habits considerably. Prior to the invention of diverse movie technique, people usually enjoy the traditional drama of China and Taiwan. However, since the improvement of the filming technique and the introduction of the sophisticated three-dimensional effects, traditional drama in Taiwan and China are getting less popular than ever. The average number of people who attend the theater for the traditional drama has dropped by nearly thirty percent compared to the previous years.

All in all, even though that the traditional cultures remain essential for every nation and individual, the progress of technology has brought about tremendous impingement on the tradition.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...-the -art technology. Apart from that , with the advances and its convenience, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, therefore, apart from, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55244755245 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18408948745 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548951048951 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3930394144 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.153846154 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245095029159 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895786398114 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563786038872 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143244921833 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510752158532 0.056905535591 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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