People have different views about the older or young individuals who are suitable for an executive position in a company. However, i believe that younsters should be treat equally by referring higher responsibilities to them. In many countries, a joint efforts especially which is taken by junior and senior members makes the company more profitable.
There are certain reasons are enough to ensure that to opt for a leadership and management position then senior staff is an ideal choice. To begin with, senior managers have a lot of experience and sufficient knowledge over the years which enable them to take a right decision by tackling a specific problem. Also, the unexpected situations are easily managed by higher authorities instead of youngsters. Moreover, older people have maintained their goodwill in the workplace area and the powerful voice of these individuals encourage the employees to work harder for increasing the efficiency of a company.
On the other hand, various qualities in young generation makes them a valuable leader. Firstly, the creative ideas and innovative perspectives is required for the expansion of the business. For instance, advertisement, share online views of customers, e-mail newsletters and embrace social media are used by juniors in an effective way to explore the business at a higher rate. As, junior members became the successful person by taking a risk in the business which needs to flourish at leap and bounds. Secondly, young people have their own dynamic and forward thinking. That is why, they became more independent to take any potential action regarding any issue.
Thirdly, nowadays, technology plays a crucial role in every field. So, by using these techno appliances in a business mould their work in a impessive and better shape rather than struck on traditional techniques. Fourthly, junior staff are more physically fit and healthy then old staff. They can easily handle a stress, responsibilities and workload on their shoulders.
To sum up, in my opinion, although young age has some limitations but it comes with useful qualities like risk taking and dynamic thinking, which are also important for leadership.
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I have already explain the
I have already explain the role of youngsters and old individuals in a company. Can u tell me where m wrong. I have considered all facts of this essay. Plz tell me sir
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. the topic is about 'older people' not 'old people'
2. the topic is about 'younger people' not 'young people'
3. the topic is about 'Leaders and directors in organizations' not 'Leaders and directors in business' only
4. don't need 'thirdly...' and 'fourthly...', two reasons are enough or four paragraphs are enough
5. you have grammatically issues, like:
There are certain reasons are enough to ensure //two 'are'
certain reasons are enough to ensure
various qualities in young generation makes them a valuable leader. //singular 'makes'
various qualities in young generations make them valuable leaders.
the creative ideas and innovative perspectives is required //is
the creative ideas and innovative perspectives are required
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 346 350
No. of Characters: 1789 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.313 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.171 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.816 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.13 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.267 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.511 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.047 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ecutive position in a company. However, i believe that younsters should be treat ...
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Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'treated'?
Suggestion: treated
...ver, i believe that younsters should be treat equally by referring higher responsibil...
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Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'effort'?
Suggestion: effort
...ies to them. In many countries, a joint efforts especially which is taken by junior and...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ness. For instance, advertisement, share online views of customers, e-mail newsle...
^^
Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...mbrace social media are used by juniors in an effective way to explore the business at a higher rat...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ances in a business mould their work in a impessive and better shape rather than ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33526011561 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89320650095 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612716763006 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4423964344 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.555555556 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2222222222 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0655909923996 0.244688304435 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0198027513189 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323241964607 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0365250632297 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257776983572 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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