Many companies invest their money in sport games for advertisement purposes. Some people think it is good for the sport world, while others believe that it has some disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Submitted by ridi on Sun, 06/04/2017 - 05:30

The shocking phenomenon of investment of money in to sports advertisement recently comes to the forefront. Some feel that it will have an adverse effect on the sports word. However, I agree with those who say that this will help sports word in acquiring new talent along with new techniques for practice. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both and beliefs as well as proffer my own rationale for a viewpoint on this matter.

Regarding those who feel that investing in to sports advertisement does not help; there exists valid reason the main justification is that players get attracted toward money and practice less for the sports. The Alaska reported just last week that sports players of Alaska who got sponsor get less time for practice as they get involve in to some other kind of business.

Nevertheless, I cannot hold the opinion in good conscience. The fact is that individuals who got sponsor become motivated and practice well and their chances of winning get increased. The Harvard reported those Asian citizens, who got sponsor they acquired new techniques and now they get hold of the game. That same Harvard report mentioned that with the initiative of many companies team those are always considered underdog are now the biggest winners.

In sum, if everyone put a moratorium on a belief that investing money in sports game for advertisement purpose and pitches in like normal people others and I can bring change. I hope that soon everyone understands how this helps sports players and turn up the game.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tionale for a viewpoint on this matter. Regarding those who feel that investing ...
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...lve in to some other kind of business. Nevertheless, I cannot hold the opinion ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, well, kind of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97701149425 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66473374259 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551724137931 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9665045006 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.25 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28799272685 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104903398027 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620267055342 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170599031834 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631886339978 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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