In modern society, obesity and unqualified health in children are becoming a pressing issue in many nations, especially in impoverished countries. Controversy has been engendered over whether institutional organizations should be the only ones to tackle the problem. From my perspective, I partially disagree with the sole responsibility of the government due to the involvement of multistakeholders in the causes of the situation.
On the one hand, the government should actively make interventions for the health improvements of children. The authorities are the most influential channel to address the problem, their activities might have widespread effects on a large scale. Their accessibility to legislation and governmental funding acts as an essential part of creating significant impacts and structurally handling the challenge. Furthermore, on an international scale, the collaborations among local governments will make the solutions to the problem more effective.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that there are other parties that should also tackle the existing difficulty. Firstly, families should be involved in tackling the warning state of health in children because they are the first and the direct ones to interact and, therefore, hold the main responsibility to provide adequate nutrition to children. Additionally, schools play an important role in the comprehensive development of the youngsters. Through educational institutions, children and parents can be sufficiently educated and acknowledge the healthy upbringing of children. Hence, in the long term, it will enhance the current situation of obesity that exists among juveniles.
To recapitulate, considering the pressing topic of children’s health, not only should the government be included in the fight against obesity, but the roles of families and schools are also undeniably crucial.
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- The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.84 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43294683427 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610909090909 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5291817904 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.538461538 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164362632826 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535888437809 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364373830876 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990386045969 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352092767453 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.59 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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