In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience important for learning and taking responsibility What are your opinions on this

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Child labour is a controversial topic. People’s opinions range from categorizing it as completely immoral to encouraging such labour since children receive the opportunity to grow and become responsible themselves. In the following, this essay will elaborate both sides. In my opinion, child labour should be prohibited, since the risks, which children have to bear with at such a young age, are unacceptable.

On the one hand, child labour can be beneficial because it gives them first insights into working life and could therefore help them in finding the right career or the right school to go to. For example, children working in a shop learn how to treat clients well and how to negotiate. So, child labour can be valuable for the small ones.

On the other hand, most countries which employ child labour have weak human and labour standards. For instance, children are misused as mine workers in Kongo, exploited, not paid well and treated badly. Since the danger of exploiting a child’s work force is very high and hard to control, such labour should be forbidden.

Furthermore, if children had to work, they wouldn’t have time to go to school and lose the chance to get higher education and a better job. This results in a malicious circle with people getting stuck in low-paid, unrewarding jobs. For this reason, child labour is a wrong.

In conclusion, child labour is a serious threat to the wellbeing and the future of every child and the potential advantages are minimal in comparison to the disadvantages. Consequently, I think that child labour should be prohibited

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1045751634 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79200508755 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581699346405 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2338695611 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7777777778 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.77777777778 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33489714802 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117592438116 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158316885213 0.0667982634062 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202646620652 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.240544987613 0.056905535591 423% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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