In many countries it is common for families to own and run their own business. Some people think this is the best way to run a business, while others consider this a potential source of problem. What is your opinion?
Nowadays, there is a tendency that most career are gradually replaced by technologies and robots in every parts of our lives.While this may cause potential problems, i believe that the benefits are greater
On the one hand, when the development of machines increases and all the jobs are being carried out , several problems can be anticipated. First of all, the number of employees losing their jobs is going to boost fast and in some ways it will affect directly their daily lives. Moreover, if the employees are not fired, the incomes they get will be at the lowest rank when they are just waiters or doing part-time jobs because those kinds of career can be easily replaced be the machines
On the other hand, there is no doubt that superseding works by mechanism makes life much more convenient so i would argue that these drawbacks are outweighed by benefits.Firstly, it is evident to us that when the machine is working, it will bring several times more accurate than humans.Therefore, the government can pay more attention on worrying the high-level job instead of the basic work.Secondly, it will help a lots in saving the state budge so the government can invest more strategies which can develop the country’s economy.Finally, when the world is participating in the technology race, replacing careers by machines may play a vital role in helping the country catching up other parts of the world.
In conclusion, although more jobs being carried out by mechanism may have potential issues, i believe it will bring a wide range of advantages for its country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98863636364 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96169926113 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594696969697 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 66.0 20.2975951904 325% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 319.49530513 49.4020404114 647% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 329.25 106.682146367 309% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.0 20.7667163134 318% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 35.0 7.06120827912 496% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0659824878821 0.244688304435 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511230981755 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0219407782153 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0428264246008 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0100257497022 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.1 13.0946893788 268% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 12.95 50.2224549098 26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.9 11.3001002004 247% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.55 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.8 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 28.4 10.1190380762 281% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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